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What is health(李嘉妮)【附评】

发布时间:2010-03-21 00:50:12  作者:小苒 发布者:小苒  浏览点击:

 

    I think I am very healthy
 
  Do you know what healthyhealthisLookthat is health(y)
 
  I exercise every day.Sometimes,I play tennis!And sometimes, I run around the part(park).  
 
   And for breakfast,I usually eat eggs,bread(,)and drink some milk.For lunch,I always eat rice,fish,and some vegetables.In the afternoon , I usually eat some fruit.I like eating apples, oranges,bananas and pears.For dinner,I usually eat noodles and soup.
 
  But I don't like eating junk food.Because they are very very dirty!And they are bad for my health.  
 
  I like drinking juice.And I drink juice three or four times a week.
 
  Emm……,My healthy lifestyle helps me get good grades.
 
  I think I am very healthy!
 
 
This article is very good , I think. I don’t know what grade you are in. In this article you tell the readers you are healthy, and you introduce your eating habbits. But you have made a small mistake. That is you can’t use the punctuations (标点符号)well. Sometimes you use Chinese punctuations, sometimes you use English punctuations. I think you had better pay more attention to it. 
标题:What is healthy (healthy 是形容词,应该用名词:health,已经改过了)
 You are great! Work hard and you’ll make more progress.

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